Exercise #866: Craft
We’ve all heard it, over and over again. Show, don’t tell. But what does it really mean?
Simply put, it is the art of using the senses, emotion, action and even the thoughts and feelings of your Point-Of-View (POV) character to allow your reader to “be” in the scene, rather than using the summarization or narration of the author to “tell” what’s happening.
For today’s exercise, use one of the following “told” story snippets and change it into a “shown” story. Your final story does not need to encompass all the points of the sample.
Examples for use:
1. Billy chose the best ring he could afford, and presented it to Mary on Valentine’s Day. They were wed before Easter.
2. Though it took years, Iris had won her dream, her own dragon.
3. A stray dog followed the twins home from school, and their parents allowed them to keep it.
If none of these interest you, you may do your own, with two versions, the first told and the second shown.
Critiquers, along with the usual grammar, spelling, etc, review, consider these questions:
* Did this help you as a writer?
* Why or why not?
Word limit: 1500 if using an exercise example, or 500 for an original Told and 1000 for an original Shown
Please use the subject line
SUB: Exercise #866/yourname